Reviewing the new lyrics for lonely-love:

looking for the message you sent or pictures I thought i took so i can remember how it went in my lonely love  x-ray, my mind your gaze, those eyes heart pierced, how kind i cried, many times

i don’t know how you say we will never change i don’t know how you say things will never change  thinking things i’d like to say back when you would give me that look with me, you somehow just had a knack in my lonely love

Could try doubling the length of the verse, stripping down the pre-chorus, and building it back up to the chorus:

i don’t know how you say we will never change i don’t know how you say things will never change  thinking things i’d like to say back when you would give me that look with me, you somehow just had a knack in my lonely love

(4-bar verse with different lyrics)

x-ray, my mind your gaze, those eyes heart pierced, how kind i cried, many times

i don’t know how you say we will never change i don’t know how you say things will never change

As a rule of thumb, the second verse should not use words in common with the first verse.

Example structure:

• verse 1
• chorus
• verse 2 (twice the length)
• pre-chorus (half the length of verse 2)
• chorus 2 (inject something new, bigger and more expansive)
• bridge
• verse 1
• prechorus (starts differently)
• chorus 3 (remove the ensemble)